Friday, October 30, 2009

Dearest...

A word to say, a word to hear..
even in ur absence i feel you near,
i want you to see, i want u to feel
you are that important to me
as India's nuclear deal..


Day passes in pain..
with you,seems like a gain,
i plee you immensely..
leave me never lonely..


I am pining for love of you,
i yearn to be with thou,
Days pass cheerless,
nights, i roll wretched..


Come to me, my love
for your absence is distressing..
i feel you in my fingers,
i feel you in my toes...

and the gloom continues................

9 comments:

ScarletTd1ar1es said...

i feel you on my lips
i feel you on my skin
you are my limbs
you are my akin

if u leave
and i find you gone
know that i will die
without u i am noone


its stupid i know, but it just kinda u know sprung. :)

ritika said...

wow...

i guess u completed my poem...

thanks..scarlet..

ScarletTd1ar1es said...

naah i merely added a little more gloom. :)

Buzz said...

It's nice and heartfelt...you could use a better simile than India's nuclear deal, since that hinders the emotions of your poem...

Buzz said...

It was nice and heartfelt...you could remove that simile - India's nuclear deal, since it is making this emotional poem funny, which is not what you intend to do, I guess.

ALOK said...

hey dats a cuul one...
i wasnt aware ki budhu ki itni mast poem likh sakti hai ...

Mayank said...

gal u really expressed urslf well...
This is like a one everyone can relate to, or dedicate to their loved ones...i loved it :):)

i feel you in my fingers,
i feel you in my toes...
i feel u everywhere around me,,
n so the gloom continues..

i treasure u like gold,
ur picture is always in my eys..
ur my dream, my, love, my life..
i wanna spend my like wid u...
i wanna spend my life wid u..

haha...jus wrote sumthn from my side..thinking abt the one i love...hope u like it too...(^_^)

ritika said...

@alok- thanks..

@mayank- dat was pretty cool.. i have got two endings for my poem...tanx..

lalit said...

not bad buddy.........keep it up....................